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What were random attacks
depriving me of sleep,
nourishment,
have since proven quite gregarious;
as my ailments,
for periods,
liken to that of a rapist,
forcing words into precarious
positions,
and speaking with a tongue,
that would lay dormant
in any other mouth.

Ay! it is words,
Words!
that crawl through my brain
like foreign parasites
upon my façade
nurturing the apathetic skin of youth
until it peels away from the core
lending a truthful look,
an untethered eye;
at the entrails
that have paraded
for years disguised
as love.

-jonathon shank



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The following comments are for "Rapist"
by huntingjonathon

poetry as pathology…?
It’s a theory…

Although I’m not sure if the rapist comparison is one that convinces… I can see why it should, the loveless violence, sordid frenzy etc, etc… just leaves me cold for some reason…

Those parading entrails on the other hand… brilliant… great visceral description of the inside-outness of writing and the failings and frustrations of communication… or…

Have I missed the point completely? I’m good at that. intrigued…

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 24, 2007 )

Jonathan's "Rapist"
Incredible! You took the words right out of my mouth, but you knew what words to say...where as I have felt this but have not been able to describe it...yet got it perfectly. Amazing descriptives.

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: August 24, 2007 )





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