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this world sees tragedy
blindly,closed eyes
walking by

from inside my heart
sinking,all i see
my mind lies
mindfully to me
in this world i live
i'm a spic,sand
a flea

tragedy,in the news on t.v.
tomarrow is something ,someone else
falling
no one's there

restlessly sleep
while another life
slips away
live without living
soundly closed

------
ray yorba


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The following comments are for "the tunnel""
by mrray

The blind can see
This sure opened my eyes I must say. The awe inspiring creation of a spic sand flea. To focus on the minutiae like this focuses the reader down to the ground. The juxtapositioning of the blind with the sighted the large and the small worked so well for me.

( Posted by: NascentPawn [Member] On: August 22, 2007 )





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