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Lawd, I realize I am walkin’ on Holy groun’ an I was jes’ wonderin’ a few things as Heavin’ approaches this ol’ sinner. You taught me forgiveness an’ fo’bearence an’ tol’ me to stay aways from da Debil. An’ I’ve tried hod, you know how hod I’ve tried. You tol’ me to believe in the Good Book an’ follow it and I’ve tried. You tol’ me the Debil was gonna’ be cast into the lake o’ farr with all his angels. I believed you. You said I wouldn’t ever ,Ever have to face ol’ Smutty Face agin. An’ now after all this time has done passed, I heard from the congregation you went an’ tol’ the Debil he was forgivin’ and he could enter into yor buzzum, into Heavin’s gates themselves. Say it ain’t so, Lawd. You said he was the cause of all mizzry, the cause of all strife, the place where all my sins done began, was borned, an’ manifested. How am I supposed to live now? Are you tellin’ me after all this here time that you want me to dwell in the same house as the Debil? Then the congregation tol’ me another thing after all o’ this. They said you warn’t a gonna’ forgive Judas Iscariot for his betrayal of the child, Jesus. I feel like I done been mule kicked in the hed, Lawd. Now I knows that Judas done a bad thing, but how bad could it really have been to be damned to Hell, no longer able to be on yor sight, for one bad deed, when da Debil did so much worse? I must confess, I jes’ don’t understand, Lawd. You done made yor decidion, an’ I know once you make up yor mind you ain’t a gonna change it. An’ Lawd, I never knew you to repent over anythin’. You hear me? The congregation is in confusion, Lawd.

I jus’ got one question, Lawd.

Is there a difference between Heavin an’ Hell, cause I jus’ cain’t tell anymore.

Yor faithfull servent,

williamhill.




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The following comments are for "Oh God!& A Fish Called Wanda"
by williamhill

God and williamhill
Love that you categorized this as horror: your first person narrator is certainly experiencing this as horrific.

Love that you used the spelling which most accurately delivers the "sound" of this. I don't get to hear this much where I live, but I remember, two automobiles ago, being in Virginia Florida-bound, and needing a hose for the radiator when somebody walked into the place asking for an "Ole" change. Never forgot that...

Love how you spin this. It is perfectly organized in seamless increments of flawless logic.

Love the question of the faithful servant...Guess we gotta die to get the answer...

Thank you for the substance of this!

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: August 16, 2007 )

da Debil
Williamhill,

Why I bet even the Debil would find this amusing. Made me laugh out loud! Thanks for this, made my day~

Blessings,

Lena

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: August 16, 2007 )

Good work
Nice dialect. You really captured that accent.

I don't know why you categorized this as horror but still it's pretty good.

( Posted by: FinnMacCool [Member] On: August 16, 2007 )

hummm
I did occasionally wonder, if Jesus was destined to die for our sins, and if Judas was destined to be betray him... is it then fair for Judas to be punished for all eternity for something he was destined to do...?

Back on Earth it's no less complicated, and justice seems equally as arbitrary and unfathomable at times... though unlike its divine counterpart there's no good looking for ineffable and infinite (or any for that matter) wisdom there... the moral decisions of mortals will- I suspect- forever defy explanation...

and these are the things that could keep a person awake at night... if we let them. a torment and a horror, indeed...

I go with "to forgive is divine", at least as close as we're ever going to get in this life time, and cobblers to what anybody else says or does...

I can feel the sweat on the narrator's brow. I loved this piece.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 16, 2007 )

Absolutely a killer!
Here was me up at an ungodly hour writing my first poem in months and when I completed (YAY) my villanelle I checked out LitOrg. Oh Charlie - this is so damn fine!

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: August 17, 2007 )

Random Reader...ah, shucks!!!
Oh, gosh, I do miss seeing more of your writing Williamhill (I mean Charlie)...this one was a classic. Where is that old Charlie wit and perspective gone? Penelope was here, your greatest supporter of anything that smelled of anti (the demon/Satan) Demeter, and was pro Wanda the suffering (Judas) plagiarist!
....Shame on me for pulling this one up. Shame on me. But I pulled this up on RANDOM READER (what were the odds?)and heck if it didn't get me a smiling again....where is that hell and brimstone of old Williamhill the honest and simple man's writer? I miss him.

Dang, but I gots to admit I have enjoyed some of the newest writings by the new (more gentler) Williamhill since this one was written, which, as I recall, was written way back when my "banning" from Lit.Org was lifted by RCallaci, so I suppose, this is written to RCallaci as God, "the Moderator" who made the decision to let me back in.... seem to of upset you a bit, but heck, that was the past, right? That's OK though...the past is the past, or so some say, easier said than thought...

Hope your health is doing well and yes, I am a devil, in more ways than one, but I am working on it...but shucks, it'z darn hard becoming holy when there are so many other devils still hanging around, ya...know what I mean? Ah, maybe not?

Again, random reader led me here...just when I thought I had forgotten, but again, it made my day and gave me a great big smile. I hope you are a better person than me and you have been able to grow and get beyond my petty beefs from the past, but alas I am not much better than Penelope when it comes to that...but as I said, I am at least workin' on it.


In other words, to shorten my reasons for even commenting....just here to say, that I misses your writing Charlie. Don't get around these parts too often these days...so, when I come to read, I always look for my old favorites...like you, Charlie aka Williamhill. No hard feelings towards you Charlie. I really did enjoy this poem so much, no shittin' ya. (Excuse my hell-French)

Blessings and good health to you, Charlie...
Namaste!

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: August 14, 2008 )





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