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It has been such a long long while,
I'm siting here
feeling cold and fragile.
I have this feling deep inside,
a thought i must confide into your heart.
I need you i want you,
our could it possibly be,
that im falling for the thought of you.


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The following comments are for "Thought of you"
by Abigaillane

Abi- "thoughts"
I really like the idea of "falling for the thought of you"... so true, too often. We can be very good at fooling ourselves, can't we?

I do hate feeling cold and fragile- you have lots of emotion wrapped up here in just a few lines-

For me, it would help if you took the time to use proper grammer/spelling - ex. capitalize "I".

nice job though-
best thoughts to you-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: August 17, 2007 )





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