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What use to be black has now faded to gray
What use to be smooth, now wrinkles away
Hands like steel, and arms like trees
Now ache with pain and arthritic disease

Eyes that shined like two jewels in the night
Now struggle to see but he says it痴 alright
He値l need your help for the simplest task
But god only knows he値l never ask

Steady hands, once agile and nimble
Now calloused and curled and always tremble
He値l talk for hours of things from his past
Back in the day, they were built to last

He値l tell you the story of walking to school
He pauses, grabs his hankie and wipes away his drool
His eyes will sparkle as he speaks of his wife
Sixty years spent together, now that was the life

He値l rock his head back as he reminisces
Her tender soft touch and her butterfly kisses
Yep, the cancer took her, he softly replies
As tears well up in the corner of his eyes

Silence befalls him as he fades off to sleep
You kiss him on the forehead, and turn away to weep
Like an old worn out shoe, tossed away to the side
Tattered and empty and left untied


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The following comments are for "The worn out shoe,,,,,,"
by POISON9901

Worn out shoe,,,
Again thanks so much for the comment.
I look forward to reading more from you and everyone else involved with
Again many thanks

( Posted by: POISON9901 [Member] On: August 13, 2007 )

a dank room
I can sense the space, the smell of the room. This is a good definition of an aged person's final journey. It seems there is always that finality that creeps around the edges of an old person's room.

I like the shoe metaphor, because it really fits ( a lousy pun, and I apologize). But seriously, even though this poem could be read as a sad set of cliche lines, you've kept the pace and flow tight so the reading is pretty effortless. It feels more like song lyrics to me, so I don't mind the cliche feel to it.

Good job


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: August 17, 2007 )

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