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Being a wasp
high on shots
of the yellow valley,
I could not part with my yellowness.
My tentacles creep along the corridor like blue spiders.

My eyes sting me
and
those on the other side of the invisible glass
Students laugh at
my desperately pressed nose and
my confectionate teeth

"Poor Maam,what a pest!"


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The following comments are for "The Indecent Teachetr"
by difficulty

The Indecent Teacher
Sorry for the typos.Apart from the title(teacher),it's "my desperately pressed nose and confectionate teeth."

( Posted by: difficulty [Member] On: July 25, 2007 )

"I could not part with my yellowness"
is a wonderful way of evoking the tension between inward turmoil and outward appearance, and the inability of us all to strike the balance at time... all told with an imaginative, metaphysical elegance... I think the word “indecent” is well chosen, it tells of not conforming to an acceptable standard … there’s wit here too… a poem of conflicts and contrasts, well put together.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 2, 2007 )

my appetite
Thank you Shannon.I hope this poem appears as a sequel to 'The Bad Teacher'.I tried to portray, lets say, my 'confrontation' with a younger generation as I am approaching 30.I feel strongly attracted towards my students,but do not know how to place it.It is almost parental,but full of anxieties of being misconstrued.

( Posted by: difficulty [Member] On: August 2, 2007 )





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