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I and he
battle furiously
about what’s what
until I tower
over him
spitting moonshine
in his eyes
and rubbing alcohol
into his feet

Bare

cold and callous
as the floor under me
I shine on him and
wonder what brought
him here
to the quarry
at the foot of the
hill

To the east and
the west
the sun has yet
to rise
and the stone I have
been polishing is only half
done

So I look into the
distance
and turn my light
to it
Wait for the moon
to diminish
and the half stone
to shine
so that I may see
the sun rise
when tomorrow
comes




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"Let the brain stumble from its hiding place, From it's cellblock, to the edge of oblivion to come to itself..."

--Safe Subjects - Yusef Komunyakaa



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The following comments are for "Moon and Half Stone"
by ttdavis

a pleasure
to see a post from you again. this is a poised and polished- in every sense- piece, its images and atmosphere are sharp, incisive and gleaming... there’s a lot of unresolved tension here, a harsh and abrasive relationship belonging to the same brutal processes as quarrying stone… complex and intriguing… imperfectly understood, but I will return…

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: July 13, 2007 )

Thank you AMG!
It has been awhile because I've been in school and working full time. Innarae keeps me honest and reminds/inspires me to write something when I feel it's time. I could let the cat out of the bag and tell you what I was thinking and who this struggle was with, but that's usually the part I like most about poetry...figuring it out.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: July 13, 2007 )

i love....
the imagery in this one...it's simple and wonderful - serious and funny...it puts me in the mind of a struggle where pre-determined relational roles have gone to shifting...begging the question, Who's the moon, here?...and Who's the stone?...Who's polishing whom?...no matter the case, the speaker's light...it's so steady, so consistent...so necessary...

( Posted by: innarae [Member] On: July 14, 2007 )

Thanks Inna
Bingo! You hit the nail on the head. It's about the stuggle between me and my teenaged son who insists on growing me as much as I am growing him. All the tension here is real. I'm glad you all enjoyed it.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: July 14, 2007 )

wonderful
Brilliant imagery...
I guessed it was The Old Man and The Sea...
same life forces grinding at each other until we are worn down...
beautifully written...
I'm going to copy it (with your permission)and let my 10 year old reading students sink their teeth into something with substance!

( Posted by: juliaward [Member] On: July 24, 2007 )

You are welcome to it
Hi Julia, thanks very much! I hope your students can appreciate it...and you are welcome to it so long as it's for educational purposes.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: July 24, 2007 )





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