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And so we are seated,
might in mass and the glowing darkness

dim lights and feverish
teem along the anticipation and coming attractions

muttering stupidity deliberates:
"Oh the abnormality of the weather lately..."
"Sun in June, would you believe!"
distractions of every sort, retort, then hide

the audience awaits in butter-flavoured anticipation
greasy finger-tips lick

compulsive mastication and violence
screen through the fening audience
scream aloud!
at the mass(ive) silence

then the lights darken
you can feel it, oh you can really feel it...

That collective hush and rush of silence
That Big Voice
That impenetrable, decibel-shaking!
sound check

That grotesquely-stretched screen
that stifles every yammering and stammering
voice in the crowd

all lights fade
except for what lies before you, and that ONE

that says EXIT

That one, last, fail safe
the rejection seat
the de-selection key
the free and painless surprise
to ease your patient eyes

stumbling and fumbling over popcorn legs and cola feet,
escape that last crushing mid-row seat
flee the drowning fleet
down the murmuring column then ou.........

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The following comments are for "The Movie Theatre"
by gab

something about this
I really liked. it has great atmosphere, claustrophobic, oppressive, quietly menacing and predatory... a sense of something not right, a prickling unease hidden behind the ordinary and mundane facade... Not sure about the use of speech-marks, exclamations, brackets etc, only because I don't think the poem needs to rely on effects for affect, if you see what I mean? interesting, tense piece. enjoyed.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: July 1, 2007 )

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