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your warm kiss and your soft embrace
are now gone
in my mind I can still hear your last breath
you are the godess with an angels face
now leaving me and moving on
and before me stands the angel of death

desperate trying to grab your shadow as you leave
trying to figure out what went wrong
my heart aches and will never be free
hearing your voice reminds me of a lost angels song

so hear me angel of death
take my life
cease my breath
I want to fall asleep

I lost my reason to live..

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I Live For The Pain


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The following comments are for "Lost Angel"
by DepressioN

Feeding the Dragon
I want to start by saying that you worry me and that life really is worth living, no matter what happens. Feel free to email me if you ever need to talk to someone.
On the subject of the poem: I can't say exactly what poetic devices make it so, but this poem really captures the essence of major depression. Rather than the rage that accompanied my own poems during my period of depression, this poem carries a sense of broken aquiesence. I can visualize a person sitting on a bed, crying, because he so desprately wants to end his life yet at the same time cannot bring himself to do it. So he begs Death to do the job.
Again, please email me if you ever want to talk about anything. I've been in severe depression (over the same matter), and what helped me was when I could have an honest converstation with someone.
Interesting rhyme scheme. 7 of 10.

( Posted by: The Recycled Avatar [Member] On: February 7, 2003 )





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