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--Just tired wanting legs to feel better--

One thing to sit in a dark quiet room
because you want to,
and time to break the habit once
going outside starts being hard to do.

Gray-yellow flowers cover meadow
by dirty brown shingled house where
cold March winds blow.

Down road in second growth
canyon wilderness
calls wanting old trails walked
by tired middle aged feet
remembering well worn paths.

Rock outcrops only more covered
in moss and rotting broken trunks
that have been by path decades,
worn smooth where tired sit.

It's a good path kind of follows
where narrow gauge hugged canyon.

Noise from canyon road
couple hundred feet above
filtered through digger pines, oak, and manzanita
and the ever present star thistles that
takes over any abandoned open area.

Went took it slow
a long shallow creek
leaves slowly traveling
turning bubbles stick
to rocks laugh.

Small tracks skunk raccoon
in soft mud where rocks
allow dry cross of creek.

Up twenty thirty feet
on path going toward Turtle rock
one paw print mountain lion
last night yesterday morning,
but been through recently
nice they have finally returned.





By: David E. Howerton


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Coyote Laughs so begins his favorite game
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The following comments are for "Just tired wanting legs to feel better"
by bhagwandave

Descriptive
I love how descriptive this is, but I don't quite get it. I was having this image of someone wanting to venture outside again, but I don't think it was filled in. Nice picture you have painted, I just felt like I was waiting for more personal events. You are a great writer!

( Posted by: kraziRenee [Member] On: June 2, 2007 )

Just tired
can relate to the "just tired..." and the landscape is rendered so well, with such attention to detail, that the reader treads the same canyon path... good stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: June 4, 2007 )





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