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Nothing sweet can mask the taste.
No kind embrace can retrace the faces, the places,
That I leave behind.

Hiding inside cleverly posed lines,
I find

Im Fine

A tale of words repeating in my mind,
Of all that what could have been?

Memories like wilted flowers,
Reminding me of days,
I wanted more. Wasted hours.
The ways I wish I told you, made you stay.

Im Gone

Ive lied, cheated, tried and pleaded for your love,
Worn out every old disguise.
Still...it's not much.

Now, I'll never see you,
Never feel your touch.
Even when I close my eyes.

------
Adam J. Dutcher

I am...


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The following comments are for ""What Could Have Been?""
by AdFunk

What Could Have Been?
I think what I like most about this is the lyric flow, which gives pace and pith to a subject that's done to death in poetry [think we all have at least one 'regrets' poem to our name... some of us have more than one].

the last three lines were intriguing too. I wonder why can't the narrator find solace even when he closes his eyes... something about that gives this a real emotional kick, giving the piece more impact and gravity... enjoyed.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: May 23, 2007 )

Come a long way
You've really developed as a writer since you first started posting on Lit. At least, that's how I see it! This is lyrical. Like AMG, I'm intrigued by the last line. Why has even the image of this person vanaished? Or has he just hidden it away out of self-preservation?

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 24, 2007 )





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