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My sweet love of the past,
Your roses have whithered since.
But crimson ones came along.
It's suppose to get better.
Why do you still bleed?
Have you gotten a fresh cut over that old wound?
Have you not found someone who would fix you?
Maybe a Shoemaker could mend that sole.
Maybe the Seamstress would sew that tear.
Maybe the Mathematician could solve that problem you left.
Find the Archaeologist to hunt for that lost piece.
Ask the Storyteller for a nice story.
Fantasy, perhaps.
Of how the lonely little boy found a lonely little girl
And ate cotton candies on the clouds together.
Maybe you'll feel a little better after
And realize it wasn't all that bad.
Beyond the dark clouds, a wing'd cupid waits
To shoot on the next blind spot.
But I could see this time,
It will be a sweet jar of honey.
I could almost see you gleaming with glee.
Next Valentine's Day you wouldn't be alone.


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The following comments are for "Next Valentine's Day"
by ^white

Next Valentine's Day
best, to my mind, are the various analogies for fixing the heart. not sure about the withered roses, because I feel I've read those words many times before... but over all, this poem is brimming with sweetness, quirky and cute.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: May 23, 2007 )

this is a
lovely poem. excellent. a poem worth remembering.

j.jd.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: May 23, 2007 )

thx.
thx! that's very encouraging, esp since i hv yet to write for sm time. :)

( Posted by: ^white [Member] On: May 23, 2007 )





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