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I feel so hallow, so empty inside it hurts.
I need to see you, my head is going to burst.
That night to remember I relive to smell you,
they way you kissed me I wish you fell too.
My stomach's in knots and my head is pounding,
I'm not obsessed! Though it's how I'm sounding.
I can see your face still and feel your hair,
I can feel your skin grazing mine so bare.
I wish you'd love me, you won't reget it,
I wish you'd think of me, I'll never forget it.
I want to escape you, but you haunt my dreams.
I look away from you, but I'm tearing at the seams.
Something I always wish we'd done and it came true,
So you'd think it was over, but I'm not through.
I want to kiss you again, this time without haze,
you left me so confused, now I'm trapped in a daze.
How I wish you'd get off of my mind already!
I need this to go faster, I can't be so steady!
So I'll wait some more, I've been waiting for years.
out of all the faces and all of my childhood peers,
you were the one in class that stood out the most,
now I'm left with a memory that I share with your ghost.
I think I fell for you the second we fell out of touch,
baby please talk to me, is that asking too much?
Until I see you again, until inside I can finally rest,
I have no problem saying, this mistake was truly the best.







------
krazi-Renee


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The following comments are for "Brought Me Back"
by kraziRenee

woa
..woa man..your poem is EXACTLY how i felt about my ex boyfriend..u really aced it.
I love the way your poem has this..school boy air to it and yet its like passionate and really flows at the right pace.
Some of the ryhiming could be improved i think, but hey im no good either..hehe..anyways it was a REALLy good poem. i enjoyed it. post some more.i promise to read them.
:)

( Posted by: Shaza89 [Member] On: May 20, 2007 )





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