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Could you check the grammar in this writing? And if there are any faults, could you mend for me? please :)

A JOURNEY MERGERS WITH NONSENCE(I persist to post it)

I am so tired, after a long outing to K city; the city was racketing around with bustling step, which I spent more then 40 dollars of fare. The departure and the retrocession took me over 4 hours.
The city also has countless acres of farms; farmers here were also in spectacular garment, and I also saw the over usage of insecticide.
The reason I went to K city was to visit an acrobat-like legislator who has nodules on his forehead, and to take an exam. The legislator said he would like to throne,
After the result of exam advertise, my family will marvel at my achievement, I might be put a wreath on my neck, all the family would share the merriment with me,
But I am not a laborious man, maybe I can only drink a vessel of booze and go to sleep



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The following comments are for "A JOURNEY MERGERS WITH NONSENCE(I persist to post it)"
by maserati

crap
.. and plz really your handle is like --- an italian small penis car. Have you ever driven an M.? Or a crazy Lotus? Or been an extreme skiier?

my advice; -none-.

GIVE

IT
UP

and I'm unfortunately hosting E.E. Cummings' spirit at this moment -- the most open poet ever ever ever.

He channels -

GIVE IT UP!

.. SHUT UP

-YOUR FUCKED -

- Estlin

( Posted by: EricM [Member] On: May 16, 2007 )





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