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WORK NIGHT ON MAGYAR STREET





A young couple lays in bed
talking
& watching late night television.


Comfortable with each other
even though
their lives are edgy.


It's winter in Toledo
& tomorrow is a work day.


They wrap their bodies
around each other
& fall asleep.


As if they were morning glories
who will awaken
to whatever the sunlight brings.


Tonight,
there is a huge ring
around the moon.


The neighborhood dogs bark
at what they think is important
@ 2 a.m.


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The following comments are for "WORK NIGHT ON MAGYAR STREET"
by gomarsoap

MAGYAR STREET
What I like, and what this has got in spades is in-the-momentness [there has to be a better phrase for it than that but Iím buggered if I can think of it right now] thereís a touching intimacy about this too, itís the couple, I think, you could believe theyíre the only two people in the world, in that still 2 a.m silence, and thatísÖ special.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: May 14, 2007 )

Thanks
Appreciate the reading and input.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: May 15, 2007 )

just so
Nice mood, and I agree, the twining 'morning glories' is a lovely metaphor.

john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: May 19, 2007 )

simply beautiful
Gomar, this is touchingly beautiful. i like the brevity and the spaces in between each stanza and the use of "&", it adds more intimacy to the couple's "aloneness".Bravo.

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: September 12, 2007 )





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