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we stood together. holding one another. eyes closed and darkness comes in, not frightening, but comforting. the darkness of the womb, the same darkness that we disappear into under the covers to stop the monsters from getting in. the darkness of childhood, the darkness of memories.

I could feel her heartbeat, hear her ragged breath, sense through that special bond just how terrified and glad and nervous and strangely confident she was. arm in arm to meet our future.

I felt sorry but could not tell her. this was my fault, all of it. my world had come to an end and it was taking hers and everyone else's with it. perhaps nothing would happen. perhaps the darkness could block out the ugliness outside.

she pulled back a little. not in fear, nor retreat. instinctively I opened my eyes, regretted it for a moment, looked down to her. her beautiful face, her eyes, her mouth. one of those moments where the world goes out of focus and everything seems perfect. the kind of love you don't just know, but feel. the love that comes in the chest, the stomach. mind, body, spirit. love.

a love that was about to be destroyed? or one that would survive while everything around turned to dust?

keeping that gaze, eye to eye, body to body. together forever. till the end.

she leaned her head to one side and looked at me.

Tell me something beautiful.

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http://twothirdsleft.wordpress.com


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The following comments are for "Tell me something beautiful"
by JonnyT

inspiring!
This peice definetly tells us readers something beautiful, alright... that was amazing! keep writting! now, not to get to personal but did you write this based off of real life or did it just cross your mind to write about it?!?
-T's Harley girl +

( Posted by: grandmasgirl [Member] On: April 22, 2007 )

inspiration
This peice definetly tells us readers something beautiful, alright... that was amazing! keep writting! now, not to get to personal but did you write this based off of real life or did it just cross your mind to write about it?!?

thanks! :)

this is part of a semi-regular series of mine. see here for related material - don't expect too much in the way of linearity, coherence, etc. tho. at present it is a series of works looking at some of the same concepts, which I have plans to develop; at present however they are not.

this particular text, however, was inspired by a dream I had, as are many of the things I write. while sometimes I write them up as-is, this one seemed to "fit" with what had gone before.

- Jonathan

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: April 24, 2007 )

HTML...meh...
I'd completely forgotten the lit site filters out HTML - the start of my comment was meant to be in italics as a response to the one above, and the "see here" bit was meant to contain a link to http://jpmthompson.livejournal.com/tag/mechapocalypse

cheers :-)

- Jonathan

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: April 24, 2007 )

i liked your story.
i found it very poetic and emotionally stimulating.

j.jd.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: April 24, 2007 )





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