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your stares, I swallow,
nibble my cold thoughts --
and I become gorgeous
brain freeze.

Be daring, be different, be impractical, be anything that will assert integrity of purpose and imaginative vision against the play-it-safers, the creatures of the commonplace, the slaves of the ordinary. -- Sir Cecil Beaton (1904-1980) English photographer

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The following comments are for "Vampire"
by clee

love the evocation of "brain freeze", like when you eat something too cold too fast... there are indeed some stares that do that to a person. edible poem. enjoyed this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 20, 2007 )

Brain freeze here to me is a humor, sweet with its wit. Made me smile; wonderful those stares are, I also could devour on them and the gorgeous that it has made me in my mind I could hold on for some lovely moment.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: April 20, 2007 )

Drifted Away As If A Snowflake
Forget the vampire persona & just write from your heart.

Any paralysis you feel is really your heart opening-up into a flower.

Don't expect to do well in autumn when the leaves fall, nor in winter, your rabbit-tracks left in the snow.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: April 21, 2007 )

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