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you hold me, see me naked,
taste me, in your ecstatic stasis --
a blink of an i;
in a shadowless light
the gossamer skin of past
a kind of unkind memories,
lacerating the frail of your stares
seething through such indifference,
like unwanted ghost, from crop to trim
you are judging my cover,
i hear the murmurs
of inebriated breaths
your calculating snob brows
are guilt-ridden
i am as ephemeral as your thought;
cold pages you hesitate to turn
though my words are a quiet intent,
you consume me, a pulsation undone
what spine: assaulting,
your glossy goodbye!
hardbound to discard,
forget-me-not, avid reader.


------
Be daring, be different, be impractical, be anything that will assert integrity of purpose and imaginative vision against the play-it-safers, the creatures of the commonplace, the slaves of the ordinary. -- Sir Cecil Beaton (1904-1980) English photographer



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The following comments are for "Without You In A Room In 2001"
by clee

Clee - without you
Loved this, I don't know how they're called, the contradicting two words like your 'ecstatic stasis' here, I love them... and 'a blink of an i', is brilliant. Realizing that the speaker being the one to fade while the other becomes vivid with his cheerio, was what hooked me in this poem. More from you puhleese?

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: April 13, 2007 )

in a room
Followed Peter here, ‘cause he has a knack of picking good poems to comment, and I wasn’t disappointed. This is a richly textured poem, full of interesting dichotomies and tensions riddling themselves out through some superbly choreographed set of words… loved the last three lines most of all, finishing a book like the end of an affair… or visa-versa… good stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 17, 2007 )

moving forward
Thanks for the wonderful thoughts, guys! I'm back, after a long hiatus here in lit.org

( Posted by: clee [Member] On: April 19, 2007 )





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