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Nang dahil sa pag-ibig
ikaw ay aking lilinlangin,
sapagkat pangarap kitang makaniig
sa ibabaw ng bundok sa piling ng mga ulap.
Kapag iyong natuklasan,
kaawa-awa ako sa aking sarili,
sa’yo’y hindi – sapagkat pagkamuhi
iyong ipapataw sa akin: katawan ko’y
gugulong-gulong pababa ng bangin,
sa isang pitik ng ‘yong daliri
ako’y tunay na patay.
Paalam, paalam pala
ang nasa dulo nito.
Alam ko naman ang wakas
bakit ninais ko pang ikaw ay mahalin?


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crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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The following comments are for "Linlang"
by PETERPAULINO

Haiku Story
I don't understand the foreign language-is it Hindi?-that most of the poem was written in, but the haiku at the end tells an entire story in just fourteen words. I love the extended metaphor of the reflection of a face in the pond.

-ArsPoet2789ica

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: April 12, 2007 )

lighthearted
Sometimes, it's not how much love you give in at the start, but how much of it you have shared with each other till the end. I guess, this poetry mirrors such thoughts.

I find this hilarious:

gugulong-gulong pababa ng bangin,
sa isang pitik ng ‘yong daliri
ako’y tunay na patay.

VERY TRUE! Love's exhilarating as when the THRILL-FACTOR moment's going up, till you don't know you're really falling (and crashing) down! Patay kang bata ka! Haha.

p.s. Please share this in English, I think it will be worth reading and commenting for our readers here. :)

( Posted by: clee [Member] On: April 12, 2007 )





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