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in the darkness of my eye
i watch you silently as though
no-one were there to listen
and i keep my affections
to my timid self until
you lift your eyelids in surprise
and i wonder why hadn't i
known you were there
time before we ever met
it's sad we find ourselves
seeing and not seeing
but knowing that in this
darkness lies love sent
in silence, bled from hearts
that've sown seeds of regret
and reaped much sorrow
but now we know each other
more than i know myself
we go through this like
no other two people
breathing eternity through
blinking eyes and warm embraces

we should ever talk of tears
shed in the name of love and letters
written in the sadness of our faces
letters written to idealized lovers
who never noticed our love towards
fantasies yet ones that made us bleed
from our hearts into emptiness let
not out but kept in in deep sobs
and pangs that overwhelmed
our breaths till one could not
live no longer for losses
for no life purpose in finding
no true love, just unrequited.
knowing where this led but
still persisting, stubborn like
a baby over empty milk bottle
going through phases and finally
doing nothing but giving up
on true love and finding
waiting arms and tender eyes
that welcome downtrodden souls
into an eternity of memory,
lost but found in the stillness
of our night

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The following comments are for "shared sorrow"
by tkal317

shared sorrow
"knowing where this led but/ still persisting/ stubborn like/ a baby over empty milk bottle..." those are my favourite lines in this, I think... runs the whole gamut of emotions. full of holding on and holding back and, best of all, letting go...

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 4, 2007 )

re: shared sorrow
This poem comes out of experience and sometimes I find it best when I can vent out like this. It's so sad and pathetic to think that the person I talk about won't ever know I wrote this because of her. At times it feels like it's useless. Anyway, thanks for commenting.

( Posted by: tkal317 [Member] On: April 4, 2007 )

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