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I think I can be alone again
If only so I can feel beautiful
Once more

Then when it was only me
I had to make beautiful things

There was no part of me
That was beautiful alone

But with precision and
Careful deliberation
I made the most beautiful
Delicate
Ornaments
A single gal could wear

My jewels and things are gone now
They burned up in a fire
That sprang from the heat
Of a passion
Stupidly called
Love

My beauty was his slogan
He’d say
“You’re so beautiful”
but I stopped listening
because I’d hear it so oftern

If every time I heard that
Phony line
A flower would grow
Well then maybe
I wouldn’t hate him so much

But instead every time
I heard him say it
A seed of resentment
Would be planted somewhere
On my body
And I began to realize
I was happier alone

That fire was fascinating
When it first happened
But everything is ash now

All the canvas and the paint
Is gone
This beautiful home is rubble now

Nothing can be salvaged here



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"You're so free, yeah you were right about me,
Can I get myself back from underneath this guilt that will crush me,
And in the choir i saw a sad messiah,
He was bored and tired of my laments,
said 'I died for you one time but never again.'"
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The following comments are for "A Lonely Beautiful"
by SEASECRETS

A Lonely Beautiful
this had me from the start, intrigued by the idea of this "lonely beauty" so different from the kinds of beauty that constantly need to proclaim and define themselves and reassure themselves of their existence... the beauty here comes from authenticity, rejecting the “your beautiful” bullshit and being uncompromising and honest with the self, however painful that might be… Not pretty, perhaps, but a case of truth is beauty and beauty truth… I think. But it’s late and I may have missed the point. I liked this poem a lot. I thank you for it.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 4, 2007 )

thanx auld
actually, you had it pretty accurate
the piece was based on an issue i had to talk about w/my boyfriend but just didnt know how, and having him read this piece i knew would not end nicely
-so instead i just explained the poem to him and i realized it's meaning was that
i just didnt feel beautiful anymore...i've just felt ugly
and i dont mean that in a physically attractive sense-i dont really care about that b/c i put myself together well which is satisfactory enough

but i want to feel beautiful in the sense that i am true to myself, and i go back to my dreams, fantasies, talents...and have the opportunity to CREATE and be creative
thanx for reading!!
-sophie

( Posted by: SEASECRETS [Member] On: April 5, 2007 )





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