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I like you and everything
You’re a smooth yard of silk,
Strolling under skeleton trees,
Breathing in death.
You’re a porcelain expression,
Hiding pain and sorrow
From prying eyes
And lingering smiles.
You’re a blazon of plastic,
A thin stalk in the wind,
You walk this treacherous line
With one thing in mind:
You don’t care who’s watching
As you crush hearts with your teeth,
Smiling all the while
The blood drips down
Your pointed chin,
And you lick at it,
A wounded dog in heat,
A shivering cat in cold.
Your opinions shatter
The low self image
You hold in the mirror,
Which every morning tells you
You are a princess,
But one with too much fat,
Too much kindness,
And too much love.
So you strip these away
With every button undone,
Every snide comment
That slips from your thin lips,
And every smoke ring you blow.
I see right through you.
Just thought you should know.

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The following comments are for "My Belle"
by Kambriel

My Belle
an interesting read, this. I like the incisive nature of the observations, and the matter-of-fact tone in which they are conveyed... there's something blunt about this, and the stark imagery reflects that... nice internal rhythm too, think this would work quite well as spoken word.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 25, 2007 )

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