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Crippled soul awakens from his coma.
As I stagger to my feet,
I am overwhelmed with dizziness
and I pour my head into my hands.

The pain still eats away at me
and I realize I have become my own parasite.
My own enemy.
The bringer of my own ruination.

The seeds I swallowed
sprouted in my belly
and committed treason.
I signed my death
with thirteen coils
and called it a halo,
threatening to take
that fatal step.

If I don't end this
it will consume me.
One way
or another.
I bleed of
my own incisions,
meticulously inflicted
with surgical precision.

Self-contempt has arose
from my infections and
what part of me I trusted
is in no condition
to save himself

I've been waiting
for someone to save me
cause I don't have what it takes
to save myself

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If it can be destroyed, it SHOULD be.


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The following comments are for "Hangman's Halo (The Crippled Soul Awakens)"
by RavusCor

Hangman's Halo
there are some lines in this I really liked, very sharp and poetically effective, "pour my head into my hands" is great, as is the whole third stanza, to my mind at least...

there's a raw bloody core to this, which is good, and a vividness in some lines that shines out, but for me it does get buried, in places, by poetic language and scenarios I've heard and seen before... there is good stuff there, maybe just needs editing and refining...

thanks for this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 20, 2007 )

Thanks again
I'm glad you liked this.
Any suggestions for refining or editing will be welcomed and considered.

( Posted by: RavusCor [Member] On: May 11, 2008 )





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