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Itís so hard to tell
What I want any more
I keep looking for change
Looking for something that fits
And when I think
Iíve finally found it
It never seems to last
What do I need?
What I think I want
Doesnít matter now
I need something
But what that is
I fear Iíll never know
Why donít I fit?
Where is my place?
Where do I belong?
I fear my heart
Is far from here
And I donít know
If Iíll ever be happy
Truly, completely happy
I have these moments
But they pass by
So quickly
They hardly seem real
I need peace
I need to take control
Of my life
But how can I?
I need help
I need friends
Most of all
I need love

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But only in their dreams can men be truly free. 'Twas always thus, and always thus 'twill be. - Dead Poets Society


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The following comments are for "What I Need"
by Zaira

Rebecca
Hi... lonely poem here that deserves a response. I really like what you have done, and the simple language is a good choice for this type of thing...but I (and it's just me) do get a little confused in the form (or order) of question/answer/statement. Two ways to look at this:

Nothing wrong of course, but perhaps the order could be tweaked a little... so the questions are interspersed at a more regular pattern... hope this makes sense.

On the OTHER Hand, the pattern as presented gives insight into the 'confused' state one would possible expect of the person asking these questions and expressing these thoughts... desperation and order are not necessarily good bedfellow... I am liking this idea the more I think of it.

Regardless, this certainly deserves a follow up poem to let the reader know how the poet is progressing. I won't sleep till I know!

( Posted by: Sandbanx [Member] On: March 15, 2007 )





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