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You reimbursed a wasted curse

made it worse

so much worse

a touch a taste

a teasing kiss

massage a mouth with mine

what bliss!

what bliss is this

thats so eschewed

and made a heart

so cold and bruised

a love refused

a recycled muse

constant musings

so confused.

how can i be what u dont choose?

not the one you have renewed

just my pure feelings misconstrued

and a teasing pleasing mood

gone in minutes

alas so rude

I was so used

I was so used.

Alas,

adieu,

I wont be missed

Too much wasted on one kiss.



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I am a misunderstood genius.


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The following comments are for "Wasted Kiss."
by damaged

Wasted Kiss
loved everything 'cept "alas so rude", there's something about the combination of alas and rude that strikes me as... well, just wrong... don't really know why. but I'm not sure that line is needed in any case, I think the repetition of "so used" gets the message across effectively enough. but I'm willing to accept that might just be me... ;)

enjoyed the use of language here, I can hear it as spoken work. good stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 15, 2007 )

Eschewed
Like this one. It has a very nice rythym to it... And ryhming 'eschewed' is as brave as it gets! Good one.

( Posted by: Sandbanx [Member] On: March 15, 2007 )





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