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Her sunny toes clicked
as she curled them.
And her legs hung
like an idiot's pencil,
tracing her ill-pronounced
vowels.

See, her titter didn’t rust with
the seasons.
Keen eyes played melodies for
her “ever green” smile.
And I envy her.

Her pouted innocence
makes splinters of my teeth,
as my mind whirls around
my printed memory
with regret.

If my limbs were to waver
in such a manner,
my shadow would knot a
noose around my feet,
and watch me tumble.

The shifting moments
have blunted our fresh notions,
and now the mounds of autumn
are irreversible.


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The following comments are for "Mounds of Autumn"
by silverscent

Mounds of Autumn
measured, considered, reflective... all great qualities in poetry, and presented here with such dexterity of language... to my mind you've got a gift for striking a delicate balance in your poems, there's never an excess of image or emotion and there's never a drought... always just right… that’s a skill many of us struggle to possess… this piece in particular has a refined quality to it... which is enviable…

And her legs hung
like an idiot's pencil,
tracing her ill-pronounced
vowels

that's just great writing, that is... I'm a fan.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 14, 2007 )

Mounds Of Autumn
I have to agree with Shannon. You have a talent
that we all struggle for. Thanks for sharing.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: March 14, 2007 )

Ridiculous
This is easily one of the best poems I have read here.

If my limbs were to waver
in such a manner,
my shadow would knot a
noose around my feet,
and watch me tumble.

I loved every line you so consicely placed, but these five hit me hard. Thank you for posting, very nice poem.

( Posted by: Essence [Member] On: March 16, 2007 )





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