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I remember
when i was a little;
you were never home.
My sister and I
always had my mother,
who was jobless at that time.
You always said, "Don't worry about me.
Just know that I love you."
Being so young,
your words were like magic to me.
So, I believed.
I failed to understand
that your job
would soon replace me.

I remember
when I was a teenager
that I could raise hell.
Not doing anything,
other than rebel
because we now live in two different states.
I could never
understand why someone else
was helping my mother raise me.
Yes, you provided
the financial needs.
But, you were not there emotionally or physically.
I tried to understand
why others needed your help more than me.
So quickly, you replaced me.

Now, I am
standing here as a woman.
Found out about all of your secrets.
Secrets that you were too afraid to tell.
Now, you have a new family.
A family that you wish for me to embrace.
All the while,
You are still replacing me.

------
Erica R. Lindsey aka Windsong [got married in '08]



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The following comments are for "The Replacement"
by Windsong

The Replacement
This is very real and identifiable. The first and second stanzas I wouldn't dare touch - they're great the way they are. The last two lines of the third stanza could use some tweaking, though. Maybe, "After all this time/How does it feel to be replaced?" or something.. I'm not very good at ending poems, either. :) All in all, though, I really liked this one. Thank you for posting.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: February 28, 2007 )





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