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Without consent he broke away,
a specter in gray,
his eyes dismal and dim,
as his hands forgot hers.

His shadow faded,
the reflection abraded,
tears fill the ocean rim,
his heart no longer hers.

Emotionless the word echoed through her.

His scent was May and June,
and she missed his moon,
everything, everything was him,
his heart no longer hers.

That minute was despair,
a chill in December air,
their love died at a whim
as his hands forgot hers.

Emotionless the word echoed through her.

Bye.

------
Art is addicting, an addict am I,
truth is I, the truth am I, the truth a lie!


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by Siah

Bye
Siah
Very well done. Thanks

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: March 1, 2007 )

Siah
I was really captured by this poem. "Emotionless the word echoed through her" is a fantastic line and it serves the poem well to repeat it. You had some other really good lines (I especially liked his scent being compared to May and June rather than any specific aroma) in here, but.. and I hate to say but on a poem that left me so full... the title just doesn't do it justice. :)

Thank you so much for posting this, Siah.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: March 2, 2007 )

I know that feeling...
Siah, you have done it again! You express so passionately and accurately the endless gamut of emotion.

I know that disbelieving, vacuous state of emotional limbo that comes with the realization that someone is forever in my past. At first, it sparks such incredulity that I cannot be sad or feel pain; it's a good thing because once reality sets in, I have already considered why it happened and found some good in it. That way, joys are more profound.

-Aubri

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: March 8, 2007 )

Bye
I'm late in commenting, as always. Wanda, Aubri, Chinadoll, thanks for replying.
I understand what you mean Chinadoll. The title is very small, an undertone of sorts. However, i couldn't name the emotion i felt when writing the poem, and only the word Bye felt right with me.
As always,
a pleasure posting!
Siah

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: March 8, 2007 )

Envy
I've been trying to write that poem for years, and never managed to get it right. he leaves her, and she's empty. congratulations, it's an amazing piece of work.

( Posted by: thesadpoet [Member] On: March 24, 2007 )





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