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The bathroom mirror
smells like sea
when I look at it
before
the afternoon class.

Old dreams
rush against my knees
and drill out the sand
around my ankles
in aqueous madness.

Books wiped clean
of cereal notes,
pieces of chalk
demand pure knowledge,
but my lessons
lisp
in memories of my glistening appetite.

Wrong words garble
on the edges of the board.
One sixty eyes
punctuate
the hour
of
a bad teacher.


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Difficult teachers
I enjoy reading your work. It is excellent. I thought you might put an ee or ea rhyme in your fourth stanza. I am not sure, but I think it serves this piece just as well you didn't. Looking forward to more.

williamhill

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: February 26, 2007 )

"aqueous madness"

paints an acute and unsparing psychological portrait, this, rendering the intensely private- often unconscious- inner world visible to all through skilful word choices... your poems are always a pleasure to read, you astutely describe the madness that lurks at the heart of ordinary situations and in the minds of men and women... there’s often something fractured and panicked in your pieces, and it’s that which makes them real… at least for me… very much enjoyed, thank you for this.

Shannon

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: February 26, 2007 )

bad teacher
I badly want to share my madness with a lot of people.As for this poem,I wanted to express one of my sudden attacks of happiness.Shannon and William,thanks for being there.

( Posted by: difficulty [Member] On: February 26, 2007 )





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