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By Nick

A quick jab to the chest and Ríkar was down. He fell backwards into the water filled alley. The Shipu gang started walking away, there shoes splashing the water as they walked. Ríkar was knocked cold soaking in the water. The town of Rockwell had been raining all day hard. It was almost impossible to see and it was just his luck to bump into the Shipu gang. Ríkar had no family, he was homeless, and now he was cold. If he had the money he could get on a train and ride out of here. It was always his dream to ride a train, but he never would.


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by NickHasReturned

OK - now what? Is R'kar a member of a rival gang? Or a loner? What about the rain? I feel the rain is important!

( Posted by: Gabion [Member] On: March 4, 2007 )

He's not much of a loner. He has new parents. He never knew his dad and his mother died when he was young. The rain part, the rain had been coming down for a long time and eventually floods rockwell (the city).

( Posted by: NickHasReturned [Member] On: March 5, 2007 )

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