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Years ago, on a Sunday morning, my kid niece and I enacting our first space mission to Jupiter, the toaster shooting us out into space, riding on cheese sandwiches and iced tea. Just one of those moments of tiny enlightenment that I'll never forget.

Tea minus Five... More...
Cheese, we have ignition and
Blast-off. M-m-m-m-m, warm toast.


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Beware the lollipop of mediocrity-
Lick it once and you suck forever.


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The following comments are for "breakfastronauts"
by metrozol

breakfastronauts
witty, good natured morsal of a poem, this. "Tea minus Five..." made me smile. nice way of preserving one of those little things that mean a lot.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: February 18, 2007 )

Marvelous metaphor!
I love this unique metaphor that you have created; it works in its own weird way sort-of in the manner of John Donne's poem "The Flea" (in which Donne uses the situation of a man and a woman being bit by a flea and therefore being one inside of the flea). This is one of my favorite haikus because the extreme restrictiveness of the haiku method does not detract at all from the intelligibility and flow of what you wrote.

-ArsPoet2789ica

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: February 18, 2007 )





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