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part 1.
You- barefoot, statuesque
more alive.
I hear your blood thumping and
have to kiss your lips.

part 2.
Morning- you've woken me
phone calls after sex
greet me with
hips swaying and eyes of friendship.

someday could be today...

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The following comments are for "freyja's love poem"
by ruina

Confounded by the structure, but with a little rearrangement all is well. I like the first part more than the second: its the open fever it describes.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: January 27, 2007 )

Norses for courses (?)
I'm a sucker for symmetry, so I'd like to see this next to your "freyja's attempt at death".

couldn't help but thinking of Freyja from Norse mythology, which added to the ethereal feel of this, to me at least.

there are both intense and sultry elements here, sensual and very much alive.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 27, 2007 )

well, Freyja is a sultry, sensual, etheral, intense person. so i wanted that feeling to the poem.

and i wish this and freyja's attempt at death were together, too! i tried to do it, but i would have had to unpublish and republish too many things...

( Posted by: ruina [Member] On: February 5, 2007 )

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