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i can feel the rain
coming from
the dream hanging
over my head.
i'm half asleep
trying to get
all the way there.
why won't it hit me?
you don't want me here.
you don't want
anything anymore.
i'm where i want
to finally be.
there's nothing i need.
i'm finding home
ripped away
stolen from me,
and once more,
i'm lost.
my mind is racing,
cell by cell,
seeing who is the fastest.
i can feel my heart
pound out of my ribs,
cracking and breaking,
echoing the sound.
knife marks tattoo
the inside of my arms..
a million to one..
a million so far,
skin displaying
a road map of hate.
seven lost numbers
your name in it's space.
asleep is where
i'm dying to be.
i'm wanting to finally
fall into place.
you're in a house,
so far away..
trying to sleep
just like me.
i can feel the rain
coming from
the dream hanging
over my head.
i'm half asleep
trying to get
all the way there.



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The following comments are for "Half Asleep"
by Veruca Salt

Imagery
The use of imagery is unique here. I love the metaphor about rain from the unexperienced dream, but what is so refreshingly unusual about it is that instead of delving deep into it, you only go as far as mention ing it. It fits the idea of insomnia perfectly; the dream constantly evades you, even thoug you may be on the brink of sleep. Great stuff.

( Posted by: The Recycled Avatar [Member] On: December 21, 2002 )





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