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cars passing on the seventies tapestry.
in tune with the falling drops of water in the bathroom.
she coming back from the bathroom saying
"come again"
you remembering being here before. not meaning the room.
she coming back from the bathroom again saying
"come again".

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The following comments are for "breaks"
by Ingi

nicely evoked sense of deja vu here, good combination of familiarity and unease. enjoyed.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 20, 2007 )

Thank you! Its been a while. In my apartment only loads with a grey screen(help).

The poem has been growing on me a while and have had several re-writings which probably(strange enough since I posted this) are better than this one.

Its to me not about dubious ideas like reincarnation, but rather the strangeness of just being alive in itself.

( Posted by: Ingi [Member] On: September 2, 2007 )

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