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We could all be sittin' underneath a tree
And they would not scratch their heads in wonder
And if they did scratch
they wouldn't understand
our speech
And if they did
they wouldn't care
What we said
if they did care
It would be too late
for them to do anything about it
To change
Whose fault is it if they are base?
ours?
If not ours?
They judge us as leaves falling
Dismiss us as whimsy

If they would place an ear close to ground
even they would notice

A leaf makes sound when it lands...

Listen.


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The following comments are for "No Respect of Poets"
by williamhill

No Respect of Poets
Very well done and alot of truth to this . Thanks

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: January 16, 2007 )

Details...
Can I hear an AMEN?! So average are the average-minded that they do not see the little things that define the big picture.

-ArsPoet2789ica

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: January 16, 2007 )

Top score
absolutely....well written, this is the stuff. The worthy efforts in life get very little notice, let alone respect. Top Score on this one, send it in.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: January 16, 2007 )

listening...
reckon the "even they" was the crux of this piece... not sure why, maybe 'cause- to me at least- it suggests that poetry exists even for/ even in the hard of hearing if they’d just open their ears and souls to it (only, that’s harder to get most folks to do than it sounds)… I like the way each line gathers momentum and weight as the poem descends, to the split second when that leaf falls. Succinctly truthful, this. Good stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 17, 2007 )

Psalm 2000.7
Nice one: our deaf-eared modern age, as Lucie states, could use many more. I have an instinct against 'them'n'us' in poems (if there must be a distinction, at least let it be worded for a dialogue, 'you'n'I'). But nevertheless, this is beautifully done.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: January 20, 2007 )





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