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How do I put into words how I feel?
How do I communicate with my keyboard
to solidify my emotions on this electronic paper?


Each day I find a new discovery about myself.
Sometimes big
Sometimes small
Each day, I am breaking the mold I was poured into over the years
I am redefining who I am
I am a clean slate
I am a fresh ball of clay, anxious to be shaped into something completely new and unique
Into someone that is completely me

I feel like I am about to burst with excitement
So many ideas, dreams, realizations, epiphanies
So many that is hard to focus on just one
They are bouncing around inside me,
Inside my mind, my heart, my spirit

I feel like Scrooge on Christmas morning
When he realized that he still had a chance to change
I no longer will allow the past to hold me down

I think the feeling I have this morning
Is that of the chains falling to the ground
And my hands raising up, soaking in the sun, the salty breeze
Embracing my life
MY life
And what it has in store for me
And what I have in store for it.

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The following comments are for "A New Discovery"
by leftylink

A New Discovery
For me the fifth stanza worked best, largely because I’m a sucker for a skilful simile, and ‘cause this one contained two of my favourite words: “chance” and “change”… This had a great last couple of lines too, because they hint not only at possibility and potential, but at a realisation of connectedness, which is not only positive, but important…

…Some of the longer lines in the third stanza didn’t grab me. Though I appreciated the sentiment I felt you could have said it in less, but that’s just me. On the whole, I enjoyed this, and the optimism and energy it engendered.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 13, 2007 )

A New Discovery
What I liked best was the metaphor: "I am a fresh ball clay, anxious to be molded into something." An adage I've embraced is, "When the student is ready, the teacher will appear."

( Posted by: echomarm [Member] On: January 14, 2007 )

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