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Lines in the room
huddle in talcum sorrow
Mouth foams
like limestone
in reckless caverns

The tongue needs no rituals.

Recover the bubbles
and learn
the syllables
of my infection.

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Dear dentist
smart as a whip, this poem. finely honed descriptions bring images to mind with pin-point clarity, rendering the ordinary strange and unsettlingly beautiful. "Mouth foams/like limestone" and "The tongue needs no rituals" are my favourites. nothing surplus about any of this, just a sharply captured experience. Great stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 5, 2007 )

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