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I have entered the bathroom with two razors

I have cut my wrist to the vain

The razor fell to the floor as I watch it bleed

So I pick up the back up razor to finish the other one

Now I am watching them both bleed uncontrolably

As my life flashes I don't regret it not one bit

As no one is there to stop me

That is when I start to cry

I realize that they were never there for me

Thanks for nothing and goodbye for ever don't show no grief

I want to thank my back up razor.

------
Nickol Buckler


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The following comments are for "The Back Up Razor"
by daddyslittlegirl

So dark...
"That is when I start to cry

I realize that they were never there for me"...

I read it for four times. Honestly, I found some words so emotionally dark. Well, the style is simple, comprehensible to all; but it's filled with many grammatical mistakes, may be due to spontaneous flow.

I would love to read it in poetic way, but it gave me a prosaic interpretation. Still I enjoyed.

Keep on, you have sensibility, you can vent better; since the techniques are adoptable, but sensibility, never. It's genial.

Regards,

Myth.

( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: December 29, 2006 )

sad
this is sad. causes me to consider the final moments of anyone who is about to commit suicide. i pray this isn't personal.

( Posted by: innarae [Member] On: December 29, 2006 )

back up razor blade
It really makes you think. short, to the point. It saddens me that anyone on this earth has to think this way.

thanks for the thought food,
tsp

( Posted by: thesadpoet [Member] On: December 30, 2006 )





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