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Swiming in
the smoke of your body
manifesting itself. i can see
your hair falling
strands of it disapearing.

I can see your body
burning, your scars
white hot.
your sores are open,
your eyes are closed.

Your infectious skin
is melting off.
I can see the blood pumping
exposed
underneithe.
The pattern of your life
is mapped out
by the burns on your back.

All the love, all the hate,
all the pain, all the life
is going up in flames
on your shoulders.

I can see you
crossing that threshold
your hair on fire, your
heart out in front of you.
I can see you
throwing your wholeness
out the window, like a match.
Your everything soaking
in lighter fluid.

I can see your body
burningm as you walk into
your darkest memories...
your heart
offered up
on your hands.
your sores are open,
your eyes are closed.


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someday could be today...





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