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NB: With The Violet Stryke



Could cut the atmosphere in here with a knife
As you suffer in silence for the sake of a quiet life
Everyone tells you we all bear our crosses
Putting up, shutting up, cutting our losses

You wait for the day you don’t have to be brave
When there’s no one to rescue and nothing to save
You wait for the day that it’s okay to cry
But the day it’s okay is the day that you die

God’s gone away, just one more absent friend
Your heaven is hand me down, make do and mend
And your threadbare heart comes apart at the seams
While you’re minding your manners and counting your beans

And you wait for the day you don’t have to be brave
When there’s no one to rescue and nothing to save
You wait for the day that it’s okay to cry
But the day it’s okay is the day that you die

Those well meaning ladies don’t know how you feel
Hanged on the clothesline, broke on the wheel
With a mouthful of ashes and a handful of dirt
So beautiful, dutiful, useful it hurts

And you wait for the day you don’t have to be brave
When there’s no one to rescue and nothing to save
You wait for the day that it’s okay to cry
But the day it’s okay is the day that you die

Could eat your heart out your chest with a spoon
You could wish on a star, you could bark at the moon
‘Cause something inside you is gagging to give
‘Cause something inside you is dying to live

But you wait for the day you don’t have to be brave
When there’s no one to rescue and nothing to save
And you wait for the day that it’s okay to cry
Dying to live and living to die



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The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for "Maiden aunt"
by AuldMiseryGuts

Sing to me baby.
Wow...now that's powerful stuff!

I can just hear it as a song...probably striking a chord with quite a few poor souls out there who have given up hope of life ever being better.

A downer...maybe. A good song...for sure!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: December 16, 2006 )

Maiden Aunt
Shannon
I have to agree with Bea this powerful.
I love it thanks alot

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: December 16, 2006 )

An exercise in empathy
Wanda, Bea, thanks both for stopping by and sharing this...

The Maiden Aunt in question is staying here for Christmas. We haven't got on very well in the past, she was always a somewhat bitter, rancorous woman. But lately I've come to understand that's not because she's a bad person, but because she's lonely, and because she spent most of her life sacrificing her happiness for the sake of propriety, a victim of circumstance and expectation... I guess there are a lot of people like that out there, passing through life unacknowledged, pretty sad when you think about it. I felt she needed her own song...

Thanks again both for commenting. Thanks also to Mercy and Jill for their help- as always- fine-tuning and tweaking.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 16, 2006 )

Maiden Aunt
Gorgeous poem with a lyrical flow!

( Posted by: FireFly747 [Member] On: December 16, 2006 )





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