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-- twig leaves are falling like trees in a storm.
on a red clutch bag -- it's mine.

Rubbing a windpipe like a reed,



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English was invented by Englishmen. Language is a male construct.Me site


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The following comments are for "Daddy"
by NascentPawn

Great flow
Nascent,

Honestly, I don't know what this says. I am slow of imagination lately. But I do like the way you say it -- it flows very well, the words you combine to define the putting on of makeup, like "Adam's apple bobblin'" and "goo-clogged lashes". It is very picturesque even if I don't see the metaphor. I probably don't know enough about putting on makeup or spiders, but I do love the line ("No way e's drownin' her in a bath")

Really well done

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: December 16, 2006 )

Unlike BW
Unlike BW, I know exactly what you're saying NP....

You clearly know how to rub a reed with your writing.

( Posted by: colinbaker62 [Member] On: August 28, 2007 )





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