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Amazing artificial ambience
Beating beyond my brain
Coming closer calmly
Dying defeated dreadfully
Embracing, encompassing, enrapturing
Freely feeling fondling
Groping gasping gyrating
Heartbeats harmonious and heavy
Immaculate, immortal, incredible
Justified juicy jabbing
Knotting, knocking, kneading
Lips, love, and lust
Magic, mystery a must
Numb noise neutralized
Oscillating ornamental orgasms
Piercing, pounding, panting
Quiet, quant, quivering
Reaching, racing rampant
Sweetly sighing sonnets
Tantalizingly tight and tangled
Undulating underneath
Vexing, varying, vaginal
eXciting, eXhausting, eXpelling
Yearning, yelling, you
Zing, zest, and zip up.




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The following comments are for "Alliterate"
by Kambriel

club scene
is called to mind by the frenetic pace of this, a chaos gathering speed and growing exponentially... hedonism distilled, is this, in all its unseemly glory... only thing I'd change is the "Sweetly sighing sonnets" 'cause to me that has too much of a measured tempo compared to the rest of the piece. Otherwise, thoroughly enjoyed.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 9, 2006 )

If our alphabet
had say 534 letters in it, this poem would have been longer. Liked the pace and theme here, although I didn't quite follow you on the big Xs. Made me think of a poem I wrote some time ago, called Cool Your Boots, although this is more intense. Well written.

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: December 10, 2006 )





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