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freezing

the earth in untouchable tonight in these parts
she’s buried in ice and layer upon layer of crystaline powder
chilled unbearably even if one was inclined to dig through it all to find her flesh
that dead skin draped in dormant grass
frozen and waiting for a thaw that’s months away
and that slivered moon is just reflecting away from her
never reaching past her winter coat
unfelt, forgotten and drifting back to darkness
I scream her name into the night sky, but my words solidify and fall to the ground like sleet,
traveling no further than my toes
she’s gone now, to warmer hemispheres
she’s touched there and basking in sunlight
she’ll never even know I cried for her
though it doesn’t matter, why would she even care
she exists beyond me, eternally

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~Drake Lightle

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by DeletedUser

freezing
ice preserves but also kills. for me this connects with thoughts about the dangers of holding on too long to thing we'd no right to keep, and the pain of letting go... usually when we realise the essence of the thing we'd grasped so greedily has been gone for light-years all along... but of course, that's just me...

there are a lot of people and feeling and things that spend an untouchable eternity under ice. a powerful sadness to this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 5, 2006 )

AMG, reading your interpretations...
...is like having my own celestial therapist. Pretty cool, cosmic, and definitely coming from a higher plane.

( Posted by: DeletedUser [Member] On: December 7, 2006 )

DeletedUser
thanks... I think. Now, if I were only able to apply the same level of insight to my own life... to dream is free, right?

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 8, 2006 )





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