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I like it hot
forget me not
The cup I sip
to you I tip
And look so sleek
it makes you creep
For coins so bright
I shine a light

Outside again
I call a friend

Smile you will be mine







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The following comments are for "Coffee To Go"
by DrKilldare

Coffee To Go
any poem about coffee is okay with me. enjoyed the lyric flow of this, and the short fast lines, like highly caffeinated speech. lot of energy here, bubbling just below the surface.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 2, 2006 )

Last Line
I agree with previous post. Good sense of the hyper caffeine rush. But I got the feeling that the last line referred to something that I must have missed. It jarred for me.

( Posted by: nascentpawn [Member] On: December 5, 2006 )

AuldMisery, nacsent
Thanks for reading and commenting. The poem was just meant to be an easy read, but maybe it became too easy. Think meaning is obvious in the last line, but we cannot agree all the time(and that's good). thx.

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: December 11, 2006 )





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