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A temple of giving
in the world of the living
a place of much comfort and peace
where quiet reflection
and much circumspection
can give one such joyful release

The hustle and bustle
of life with its tussle
can make one become very fraught
this temple then soon is
the place where one does biz
for there one unlearns what's been taught

For soon one does realise
the value of real eyes
and ears that truly do hear
this temple does offer
a wonderful coffer
where love does surpass all one's fear

This temple of giving
in the world of the living
is one's own sacred space deep inside
no more need to wander
over wild blue yonder
one's own home's the place to reside

This place of reflection
for inner inspection
so pure is this temple of giving
this place so serene
for a king and a queen
is right for the world of the living

------
Love and light
Elizabeth

Humility is rare because to have it you have to want nothing, yet when you have it you get everything.


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The following comments are for "TEMPLE OF GIVING"
by ElizabethAFeisst

I love the sentiment here...
I enjoyed your style and love the sentiment about giving. Your statement is forever true.

Each stanza is perfectly structured and it flows quite well. Usually, I don't like poetry that rhymes because you can plainly see the writer trying so hard to make it rhyme, that they lose their freedom, they lose something important to their effort. Thanks for posting this.

You made this work extremely well and it looks effortless. If you're going to rhyme, this is the way to go.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: November 28, 2006 )

Hi TTDavis
Thanks for taking the time to comment...most of my poetry is rhythm and rhyme because that is how I see life... the heart beat (rhythm) and the cyclical process (life repeating itself -ie rhyme)
Blessings

( Posted by: ElizabethAFeisst [Member] On: November 28, 2006 )

Soothing In Every Groove
This poem had a very calming effect on me. It seems to fall somewhere between the Gospel of Thomas and Eastern philosophy, yet it's put very simply and originally. Good job.

( Posted by: BAAL [Member] On: November 28, 2006 )

Thank you
Baal, many thanks for your kind comment... am glad this writing spoke to you...

Blessings to you

( Posted by: ElizabethAFeisst [Member] On: November 28, 2006 )

Many thanks
Lucie.... your comment is most kind.

Elizabeth

( Posted by: ElizabethAFeisst [Member] On: November 28, 2006 )





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