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Magic Medicine

Slow hallowed whispers woke two girls
while a greasy snake oil man,
with whisky breath and yellow scarf,
dealt cards as the water boiled.

The magician coiled two hairs in a bowl
then sat in a weathered bronze chair,
got a knife, a pipe, a bottle, and a hat.
Deftly combined patchouli and lime.

Twins with cancer and curls,
with blood as thin as light,
were offered injected chemicals
from his magic stovepipe hat.

The snake oil man he ministered,
with a liquid scent of faith, but
slowly and quietly both girls died.
Tragic but matter of fact.

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English was invented by Englishmen. Language is a male construct.Me site


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The following comments are for "Magic Medicine"
by NascentPawn

Magic Medicine
and of course there is no magic medicine, right?

atmospheric, this, with effective discriptions and details... there's a fantastic quality to the langauge to the first three stazas, obliging you to read in an awe struck hush, paving the way for the harsh reality of the last two lines... effective composition here, good stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 25, 2006 )

freaky
A great well-written poem that tells a scary story. Really enjoyed!

Michael

( Posted by: quill [Member] On: November 25, 2006 )

Witches Brew!
My vegan, pharmaceutical hating and anti- medical fraternity son, just loved this one!

He's been spouting this philosphy for years...claims no drug can cure the body as well as the body itself with no chemical interference...just eat the right foods and you can cure yourself of ANYTHING!

I partly agree with him...but I still take my medicine as proscribed!

Great work!!


Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: November 25, 2006 )

Unexpectedly Cool
I've been reading your stuff, but this is the first one that really leapt out at me. Well-crafted, enjoyable, and thought-provoking. Great work!

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: November 29, 2006 )





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