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I don't like it

On the front step, in fizzy rain a squatting aight: stops.

Her hands close her face, she shudders like a snake

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by NascentPawn

I don't like the settee take it back
"she shudders like a snake in snow" worth the read for that line alone... uncompromising picture this, though I'm not sure I "get" it yet, I love the language used to paint it. Have read it three times already, and Iíll be coming back to it again. Good stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 22, 2006 )

Thanks
Thank you for your kind comments

( Posted by: NascentPawn [Member] On: November 25, 2006 )

Ironic redemption
I can't say I get it. I read it through twice and then read Lucie's comment. Went back for a third go-round and must say I liked the way her mind wrapped it for me. Still, despite the fact that I feel like something has eluded me here, I liked it very much. Great use of imagery and a thrum of tension that carried throughout.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: November 26, 2006 )





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