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my shadow


standing naked
in my own shadow
shivering
your name a quivering whisper
slipping through
chattering teeth
no response
no reply
but you are there
i know this
instinctively
if you were not
i’d cast no shadow
i’d bleed unfurrowed into darkness
i’d be the withered moon

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~Drake Lightle

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by DeletedUser

my shadow
and you can't have shadow without light, right? Shadow isn’t the same as darkness, which is an absence of light, the pain of shadow is from the proximity of light’s presence. Complete darkness- which would at least be whole- seems like a relief in comparison… ‘Least, far as I’m concerned.

highly relatable this, shivering, quivering, chattering teeth and all. I know that feeling, I think. "bleed unfurrowed into darkness" is brilliantly expressed. thanks for this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 21, 2006 )

my shadow
Loved this, the vulnerable and searching feel of it. The last two lines were stark and poetically stirring.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: November 26, 2006 )

AMG / Chinadoll...
...thanks for the comments. It's appreciated that you take the time to not only read the piece but let me know what's working (and what doesn't).

( Posted by: DeletedUser [Member] On: November 29, 2006 )

For Quivering Sakes
Let not!
your moon be withered...
to the shadows of a quivering whisper

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: May 27, 2016 )





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