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Ain't It Pretty?
Faint baubles driven by the imagination
Ruled by fear, wonder and lust
Curious of the man waiting on the dark side
Of the fence
Driven by pressure
To perform
Wondrous miracles
To the sound of thunderous applause

So it stands
Poking at the moment
When hairs stood on edge
Hiding its robed head in the proverbial sand
reimagining pretty as food for the soul
It is written
That man should not live by bread alone



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"Let the brain stumble from its hiding place, From it's cellblock, to the edge of oblivion to come to itself..."

--Safe Subjects - Yusef Komunyakaa



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The following comments are for "Ain't It Pretty?"
by ttdavis

Happy Discovery
After you posted such a kind comment on my poem, I thought it would only be fair to check out your work. I usually do that, anyway. There's pressure to respond to a nice comment with another nice comment, but I've always tried to avoid that. My policy is strict honesty, whether it makes me popular or not! Haha.

But, Jesus, this is really good. I like the air of mystery, the enigma, that emanates from every line. It's best that you don't come out and specify what "it" is, as it makes the poem more universal and keeps people coming back. I must have read this thing about four or five times already, and I'm still not sure I've figured it all out. Which is goiod.

Hope to see more of you around here!

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: November 20, 2006 )

I concur
like Viper I followed a kind comment here and was thrilled by how genuienly good this was... intriguing enegmatic poem this, "reimagining pretty" in to a surreal, sci-fi landscape that's pleasingly ambiguous yet teasingly suggestive...

the last line's the icing on the cake. I will return. great stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 21, 2006 )

Thank you all so much
Your kind words are so very much appreciated. It
is so awesome to see the different meanings each of you have drawn from it. Thank you....I hope to share more soon and look forward to reading your work as well.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: November 24, 2006 )

fearfully phony
Hey Thais. I love the poem. Immediately, I am taken into my formative years when imaginations of living the 'good life' were solid.

Only, spiritual maturity has replaced such superficialities with the reality that my steps are ordained by God and that sometimes living in him is just not so 'pretty'.

Thank you for sharing your gift.

( Posted by: innarae [Member] On: November 28, 2006 )

Thank you Innarae
I appreciate you sharing your thoughts on this work. Only with this type of feedback will I gain the maturity I need to make it to Cave Canem.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: November 28, 2006 )





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