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It seems the less I believe in God,
The more solemn life around me becomes.

Dear pal,
How's heaven?
I look both ways,
Before crossing the street to reach
This better vantage point
Running errands,
In my full shadows;
Pinned neatly above
My shadow –
A god of thieves –
I have seen more than I ever saw.
Here the sky has no forbidden borders—
Things vanish in all directions.

I remember a past plot,
Dear pal, of your God in heaven,
Made out for clipping
Our earth-bound fire wings.



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The following comments are for "To Whom It May Concern"
by Myth

To Whom
Blown away by this. Thoughtful, subtly-shaded, resonant piece. To whom indeed... think I know that feeling. Thank you for finding the words for a state that is so often indefinable.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 19, 2006 )

To whom it may concern
Myth, I don't really know how to comment on this piece, except that the image of 'earthbound firewings being clipped' stays in my mind. I wanted to embrace the philosophy of the first two lines, only the being undisturbed by it disturbs me, yaiks, I sound like I'm not making sense, but I know what I am talking about and afraid it is only me who knows, do you?

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: December 1, 2006 )





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